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!!tJbg4u7m4h8 04/03/11(Sun)07:14 No.24805313
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As he continued, the path became more and more rugged, the lack of traffic apparent. A rise in
the path blocked Spike's view of what lay ahead, but as he climbed it, he came upon a clearing in the
forest. A hole in the canopy above allowed the sunlight to stream in near a small cabin by a brook.
The cabin was a single story, and it was doubtful it had more than two rooms, at least judging from the
outside. More so than anything else, however, what stood out most was how... sloppy it looked. The edges
of the house hardly looked like they fit together, and there were clearly small gaps between some of the
logs. Some of the logs the cabin was made of weren't even fully debarked and smoothed.
Scratched into the side of the cabin was a large numeral 'one', apparently marking the address of the
cabin. "This must be the place," he muttered to himself, and strode up to the door. The closer he got,
the more he noticed a pungent odor emanating from within. He strode right up to the doorstep, which was
really no more than a spot of the ground that had been hastily trampled and scratched at, and raised his
hand to knock on the door. "Well, here goes," he reassured himself.
His knuckles rapped on the door, which gave back a hollow thunk as it began to swing inward. He heard a
cough from inside, and a female voice followed. "Achugh, chugh, cghoo, who's there?" it said, "Come on in."
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An that's what I have so far.
Did I set the seen right? What can I do to make it better, etc.
Keep in mind, the story is about to jump back up to where it started with Twilight and Spike just getting to the clearing together. |
