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03/05/11(Sat)23:31 No.24051452Guys, judge my shitty writing. :D Was a start for a fic, but i kinda lost the main plot, so now i just wanna see how good my writing seems to be. Be as critical as you want.
“Uh, Pinkie, what’s wrong?" asked Twilight, Pinkie was kind of freaking her out, she started trembling and falling more than her usual sugary self, and it didn't help that her eyes were constantly winking, and her legs kicked the air randomly. She suspected it as another one of Pinkie's twitches, but she never saw this kind.
"N-not su-sure." Her constant trembling bothered her speaking. "I n-never had th-this kind of twi-twitch." Twilight grabbed Pinkie's shoulders, attempting to stop her incessant shaking, which worked until a stray kick jammed itself into Twilight's jaw, knocking her unconscious.
"Twilight! A-are you o-okay?!" Pinkie kept nudging her hooves against Twilight's back, but got no response. She started to panic a bit more, and with some struggle, picked up Twilight and ran to Nurse Redheart, who was nearby, tending to Snails because Snips broke his arm recreating a wrestling move. |