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>>23100453 Well... I liked it?
A big thing I worried about after the first chapter was "She acts nothing like Trixie!" but severe trauma like she went through does tend to change a person, so I stuck it out. And then it turned out you were using that on purpose, so it worked out alright, I suppose. My biggest complaint would probably be that Trix really does act NOTHING like Trixie, and it's difficult to see how the two came from each other. I might've thrown in a mannerism or two that Trix had kept, just to smooth out the transition. I'm also not a big fan of 'Equestrian Wars' in the background, due to the whole... idealism thing, wherein the world appears to be otherwise running off canon (hard to put into words here), but that's just my personal opinion, and again you made that actually relevant to the story, particularly in the endgame.
Good points: I felt Dusty was a pretty well done OC. He didn't steal the show, but he did have his own background and purpose. Also, I thought Trixie's last hurrah was pretty good. Seems silly that the elements of harmony harmony oh love would be brought out so easily, especially twice in one sitting, but it's how Trixie would've wanted to go out.
For all my complaints about her, Trix did make me d'awww a lot, and I enjoyed both her and the story. Hope to see more from you. |